Fangala the Flying Feline

Only one complaint. I think you should use the word "your" instead of "my." Personalizing your poem calls attention to you, not the writing. Other than that, very well done! ...

Whoa. Super cool. Sounds kind of like Moon Children, huh? You and I think alike. I love the idea of the tree.

What can I say? Good, good, good. Only the part about Krobeth finding Christian and Mary under the bed was WAYYY wordy. Try to cut out unecessary words and add ...

Haha...pigeons. I like the humor aspect here.

OH MY GOD! Listen, this is incredible. When I started reading this, I thought it was just some dumb teenage drama. But this last chapter got my heart racing. I ...

Oh, one more thing. Why would Christian tell his parents about his strange encounter? Is he very close to them? Most teenagers avoid their parents like the plague, so if ...

OH MY GOD! *keels over with laughter* You are a truly talented comedian! The line about going pee nearly killed me. I love poems that smack you in the face ...

Chapter Two is up now; you can check out my profile to read it. Faith thanks you all for the comments!

Um...yeah. Pretty much human and rabbit-dog hybrid. Very cute and cuddly. I'll try to post a picture or something, but beyond Word, I'm not the most computer-literate person. Thanks for ...

Muchas gracias for the comments! Sorry that this is so rushed; I can fix that. And Seraph, thanks for the idea of going more into Faith's head. I didn't even ...

Hey, nice job. I must admit, when I first saw this, I was like, "Oh Lord, every line starts with 'forgive me'. But I was hooked as soon as I ...

Oh. My. God. Sheer genius!

Very nice. It totally painted a picture in my head, and the short, bouncy rhythm compliments the theme. Bravo...I love your poems!

Aw, thanks, Muffin! I was beginning to think this poem was invisible! *purrs*

I really like this. Don't worry about the flow; it sounds better with the rhyme slightly askew. My only problem is the last verse. I don't know--it just sounds sort ...